One day there was a boy called James.he just enterd secondary school. He was a very nauty boy and a show off.but he did not have any friends or anyone yo talk to.but just then he had an brilliant idea!He started to a imagenary friend.So they both lived happily ever after.

February 8, 2015 at 3:42 pm
Alexander,
There are some clear ideas here, but you must try to develop them.
Targets:
Try this – when you say the the boy was naughty and a show off, try to explain which actions made him seem this way to other people. Be as specific as you can.
Write a plan. I’ve always found mind maps very helpful with creative writing.