One day my family and I went to the park to have some fresh air and then that’s when I thought of the sweet prank. So when my brother wasn’t I quickly emptied the chocolate and I replaced it with a rock about the same size of the chocolate. Then after that I gave it to my brother saying that I don’t want it so I dared him to eat it with his eyes closed so he ate it with his eyes closed then he realized that it was a rock because he couldn’t chew it so the rest of my family started laughing.so we went home . went I got home with my family was in the living room then I saw a Pepsi drink on the table so I took it and I took it and went to my room.
June 24, 2015 at 6:05 pm
Hello Alexander,
This seems like an excellent idea for a short story with lots of potential for development.
How will you increase this to 500 words? What ideas will you develop? Why? Write a plan?
I think you could build tension and anticipation at the points before and after your brother decides to eat the sweet.
June 26, 2015 at 12:35 pm
Do you have to do 500 words?